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Post by benedictjjones on Nov 17, 2008 12:05:08 GMT
**pulled down to edit***
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Post by benedictjjones on Nov 19, 2008 12:44:06 GMT
didn't realise there was a profanity filter on! obviously i don't write 'thingy' in my stories...
and surely d**es are a flood defence not a rude term for lezzers! unless i misspelt it of course...
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Post by carolinec on Nov 19, 2008 12:47:42 GMT
I think the filter is on automatically on ProBoards, unless it's specifically turned off, Ben.
Sorry I haven't had the chance to look at your story yet, or to join in much at all. Busy .. busy .. busy. Will be back when I can ...
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Post by coral on Nov 20, 2008 11:11:56 GMT
I did giggle, I haven't heard it called a "thingy" for 30 years!!!
Great work Ben.
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Post by Calenture on Nov 29, 2008 12:59:44 GMT
didn't realise there was a profanity filter on! obviously i don't write 'thingy' in my stories... and surely d**es are a flood defence not a rude term for lezzers! unless i misspelt it of course... I've now deleted all but one of the words in the profanity filter, Ben. This story's interesting, but I'd begun to think that Herod and the killer were the same man. The build-ups to the killings are well done, and the characterisations for policeman and killer work pretty well for the story's length. But I did feel that the end was a bit rushed. The meeting of the two men seemed a bit abrupt and their fight seemed over too soon. The writing is good; I think it's the pacing that lets it down at the end. |
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Post by benedictjjones on Dec 2, 2008 14:46:10 GMT
^cheers! my sister thought the same thing about the killer/herod when she read it. i have been meaning to extend how herod discovers the killer and also try and move him away from being a stereotypical hard drinking copper.
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albie
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Post by albie on Mar 28, 2009 11:23:41 GMT
Are we meant to think Herod is the killer? The way it is laid out, with no clear distinction, gives that idea.
I think the use of the word "arse" was too base.
I'm not sure how you guys like to crit a story on these forums. I'm used to comparing the posted fiction on the net to professional work. Some may find that crushing. I find it the only way to help anyone.
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